‘Kedah, where are you? That enough, now!’
That is the first sentence in The Sheikh’s Baby Scandal. A very young Kedah is about to stumble on a terrible secret and his nanny is trying to find him.
Initially the first sentence I wrote in the story was—
‘Kedah, do you even want to be King?’
The question was being asked by his father, Omar.
I shall be honest and admit that the second sentence is the one I prefer, however, it started the story at the wrong point in time. After a lot of angst and tearing my hear out I could see that the reader really needed to know the secret up front and to understand the dread that Kedah carried in his heart.
And, if you change one thing, everything changes and so, as it turned out, his father never needed to ask the question—it was clear that Kedah was fighting to be king.
I still like that opening to a story and I think I might just have to use it, though with a different hero of course ☺